I think if you changed the format this would read better.

I understand that you wanted this type of ongoing style, without periods or breaks. However, it confused me a bit, the way you go off into an entirely different direction toward the middle/end. I thought the expression 'input/output ratio' didn't fit very well. It sounds a little too 'technical' when coupled with your raw descriptions in the beginning.

A couple of mistakes here and there. (: Nothing you can't miss if you read over this.