This is marvelous. Absolutely astounding. I love, love, love the imagery. gorgeous!

lovely imagery again, made me smile!

interesting, don't quite understand the silver aspect and why it won't hurt her, but none the less i loved the imagery.

Pretty. I'm clueless, but pretty nonetheless.

she didn’t seem to notice too much/about where she was... the about doesnt seem to make sense

i watched her from my window i could.. you need a period or a semicolon between window and i

she never looked up; she never looked/down…she only seemed to look out with.. putting down on the new line seemed odd

I LOVE this piece... telling it as an observer is really amazing... and I like how you bolded that second hard and I also loved the ending... it was really beautiful

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Beautiful ending. Finding redemption in the rain is a good subject; adding personality to it like 'silver' is a good idea.

I don't really like the second 'hard', though. It adds redundancy because the rest of the piece is so straight forward.

-J.A.

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