seemed to not end well although the imagery in this was wonderful yet again. i'd think of a better way to end it cause it just seems like pretty words without a meaning or plot.

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I like the play on the word "reigning", and if none was intended, it's good nonetheless.

Nice imagery dearest.

great word choices, but the parentases were unessiscary.

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prophecies painted the floor beneath/them in golden dust with pictures of... putting beneath on the next line messed up the flow in my opinion

I love the lines about the stained glass windows... that was really unique and beautiful... the first line is nice too... especially how it goes with your penname... great job

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Wonderful imagery and rhythm.

The first stanza is breath-taking; peaceful and inspiring. 'Feathers fell from the ceiling' is just as lovely. )

I adore the magic.

The last paragraph sounds repetitive because you use the verb 'paint' twice. Maybe you could use something like 'dyeing' to describe the stained glass windows?

I like the time progression shown by your phrases in parentheses.

-J.A.

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