I liked this one, and well, i think that's the last one for today, lol, my brother just tried to burn me with a homemade flamethrower.

amazingly written, it came from the soul my dear. my favorite parts , odd but i really like the way it makes me slow down and piece the words together.

I love the way this was written. I'm really fond of poems that read more like stories and that is what i felt this was. Good job!

beautiful piece.

Faith

-humbled to her knees, to her face... to her face sounded a bit awkward

-she was scared, dying, hurting, crying... i feel like dying should come last

-the wages of sin was death/but without sin one couldn’t die... really interesting two lines there

I love the format.. the no spaces here and there and the parenthesis and the bolding was really great.. I also love the ending.. it's sweet and heartbreaking.. the rest of the piece is great as well

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