| Reviews for When I can't lie |
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Averybarbarian 6/30/08 . chapter 1Well written! I like it. I really liked the lines in the chorus "it's hard to repeat your words/it's not what I feel" staying with the truth and being honest to oneself. I liked the whole piece it conveys a good point. Good job. Keep writting! |
simpleplan13 3/13/08 . chapter 1because of FP's screwy format I cant tell where the chrous ends... maybe italicize it or something? I really love that part about the broken pencils and the blank page that was a really great image One thing... how do you throw pictures? that seemed like an odd phrase. I couldn't figure out if you were throwing them out or just tossing them around, which seems odd. Anyhow I like the ending a lot... really great piece |
mockerytheif 3/10/08 . chapter 1 this is really, deep, i can picture how you feel but never know, blieve me i could try to feel what you feel but itll always be a differnet feeling is what im try to get it. awesome song though keep up the great work! |