This is a great poem! I love the line "uncertainty becomes insanity". Because of the short sentences and strange syntax, I got the feeling that this poem should rhyme and was rather disconcerted when it didn't. I suggest that you take advantage of the freedom given by no rhymes and try to make the poem flow more from line to line and idea to idea.

This flows beautifully Dani. I get flashes of ethereal light in the firmament in my vision with this one. I really like this!

well.. thats optimistic. =) lol. i like it thoo. esp "surrounded by white walls, uncertainty becomes insanity." =) niice