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Reviews For: Wrists

Lady of Secrets 2008-03-31 ch 1,	abusebeautiful. shows true emotions;anger, depression...everything. I applaude you. this has both a good free verse rhyme scheme and good audience tie-in.-Salem
Sexy vampirechick 2008-03-28 ch 1,	abuseReview Game!! According to rule 10,I owe you a review.So here goes! The beginning was really strong.Until the parts where you started to break off a too long sentence into fragments.Like this line, "You tell me My dreams Will never become More than the hate, You've given me once." I think it would sound better if you put is as: "You tell me my dreams, will never be more than the hate you've caused." (I don't know...just my opinion.) The lines I love the most was, "Pain is here, So is hate Craved into my wrists My mind awakes." I really liked that one!Keep up the good writing!
just.because.lemonade.stand 2008-03-22 ch 1,	abusewow. I loved it. Outside I smile, Inside I weep, Cuts on my wrists Stop in my sleep. i loved that part themost though
simpleplan13 2008-03-18 ch 1,	abuseCraved into my wrists.. did you mean carved? Keep on punching,... I didnt like that line because it kinda came out of nowhere. What are you punching? What does that hafta do with your wrists? I like this... the idea is really great and the last stanza was specially powerful and made a great point. Nice job.