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| sophiesayshi 2008-05-05 ch 1, | abusehi! thanks for your reviews. just to say, i have unbolded my stories at your request! this story was a really good read, you are VERY talented! it was really interesting to read because most of the time, i write in third person, in past tense. maybe first person present tense isnt so bad either. actually, you write with it really well! |
| EllyMurk 2008-04-22 ch 5, | abuseThis story is so cute! It's not too dramatic or too boring, and the pace is pretty good. The characterization's convincing and so is the sequence of events, mostly. I literally had a jaw-drop moment when David told them his bank account number, so that worked too, though I think there'd probably be extra safeguards against identity theft... Anyway, it's awesome. |
| Lurid Black 2008-03-22 ch 3, | abuseSweet, I like the dialogue and its descriptions, vivid imagery, and well written, keep writing ~Lurid~ |