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| Skateylin 2008-03-12 ch 1,  | abuseWow, really nice piece. Beautiful, and quietly emotional. It does take a little while for the story to actually get into full gear; the beginning sounded a little like an infodump. But overall, really nice, and I love your closing with the cat. At first glance, it seemed a little disconnected, but now that I look over it again, it fits nicely. Nice job, overall. |