if this is the kinda stuff that just "pops into your head and dosen't go away" i would try seeking some help. i mean dont get me wrong it was good you kno it kept me entertained for a while. the story was great but thats not normal... if you think things like this pop into other peoples heads it dosen't. Its not normal... i mean im not one to talk cuz you kno all my stories are based on dreams and i write some freaky ** but...
Try a shrink.

-Brandy.

Flame you? Ha- I think not! Honey, this was bloody amazing. Far beyond brilliant. The way you were able to piece it together and just even come up with the plot is admirable! It was well done! No--Beautifully done, I think!

I'm so sorry I didn't get to this sooner! Please feel free to nag me as much as you want!

This was amazing! It was such a great idea! At first I thought he was in love with his father, but what you have is much better! hehe. I know, I know... I'm sick.

I hope to read more from you soon! This is going in my favorites and you're going on my alerts!

O.O Whoa. Totally not what I was expecting it to be. At first I thought it was a father/daughter situation, but then... *is speechless* Lack of warnings always lead to surprises! (Not that I'm complaining.)

The plot/idea was very good and (I thought) pretty original, so kudos to you there! :D Though I'd like to know why the Manor caused everybody to take advantage of the young 'uns in their care, but that's entirely your choice.

The characters (I personally felt) could have been more fleshed out; but then again, it might have weighed down the narrative... The fact that you didn't use their names was an interesting choice, but I felt that I would have connected with the story more if we'd been given SOME clue about their identities.

Some things that irked me:

"Only, she didn’t have to worry about that" -You don't need the comma here.

"He slipped a second finger in, all the while, his mouth was working my nipples, one after another" -Again, too many commas; it kinda disrupts the flow of the story

"He and Tom arrived to Auntie’s to tell Mother and me the news." -"at" Auntie's?

Overall, well done! :D

This story is wicked! You should continue it for the live of the ghost! That would really scary and a bit creepy true! But just one question are you a boy or girl?