This poem really shows what it is like to do something like this. It shows the truth of what you feel, as I well know by now, and is beautifully written. Another great work, Lauryn Elizabeth!

the last line seems out of place... perhaps you should review that...

otherwise, this is a great poem!

-w. griffin

I'm not sure if the last line fit the tone of the rest of the poem, but maybe that's what made it so wrenching.

Your easy rhyming made it all the more touching, sinister and poignant. Well done.