i can understand some of the french,
i can't say i have a favorite line, the
whole thing's

beautiful.

i.. think this poem doesn't really work if one doesn't know what the french bit at the end means; fortunately i fed it into the babelfish online translator and got a rough approximation. would i be right to say it means, roughly, "our spirits are free"? i don't know. please do clarify as i think it makes a great difference to the poem.

on the other hand, i can't say i dislike this- the french i didn't udnerstand wasn't enough to deter me from liking your simple two-line verses. the first line is really good and it drew me in, and i really like how the persona seems to fall deeper and deeper, drowning.

i like the surreal imagery and fanstastical sound to it. nice.

in the last line, don't you mean "ce soiR"?

thanks!
roughly,
tonight our minds are free

very good rhythm for a free verse. Can I possibly get a translation for the last line?

daniel i didnt realize this was you
i need to re read

love you