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Trilock 2008-03-18 ch 1,	abuseNice, little refreshing poem. It's a nice break from the usual mordant subject matter I run into (and guilty of harping on as well). I don't think this poem warrants much of a critique, so well done.
Lana 2008-03-13 ch 1, anon.	abusei love soaring. floating where the cows are
Esther Jade 2008-03-13 ch 1,	abuseHey - I hope my robust reviewing style doesn't offend me but I enjoyed your other poem so I'm going to have my say about this one as well. Let me start with what I don't like: the punctuation. Punctuation is one of my other bug-bears in poetry. As well as needing to be grammatically correct, punctuation in poetry is the best signal of how the writer wants the poem read. Most people don't put in enough punctuation - this, thankfully, is not your problem (if it was, I would not be able to review much of your poetry as poetry without punctuation irritates me beyond belief). But, the way you've used punctuation in this poem doesn't really work for me. I think I know what you're trying to do but it just doesn't work for me. Now to the positive: I like the wishing-stars link between the first and second stanza. It gives the poem a nice, unifying image to flesh out the stanza of what is quite a stop-start poem. I don't have a problem with it being stop-start; I just think that having a nice, solid image at the centre stabilises the poem. Other think I really like is the ending. It's a nice twist and it gives a very real emotion - that soaring emotion combined with a determination to make it last strike me as authentic.
me. moi. ich. 2008-03-12 ch 1,	abuseyay! happy writing can make anyone happy, so thank you for brightening my day :)
DJ DJ 2008-03-12 ch 1,	abuseNice poem wish I could be that happy.
bittersea15 2008-03-12 ch 1,	abuseThis poem made me smile. I may not know what made you happy, but lovely writing. =]

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