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| Blood in Water 2008-04-22 ch 1,  | abuseBrilliantly written; the words seem intentionally stilted so that the words, while retaining flow, are allowed a sort of beat that words extremely well with the concepts conveyed. "It’s caring that does us in. It’s safer to stay numb." The blunt declaration of human emotion and its endurance is really eloquently delivered, I think. lovely. |
| Schizophrenic.iv-personalit... 2008-04-16 ch 1, | abusei love this. its written amazingly well. I wish i had something constructive to say, but i cant think of anything, i wouldnt say its perfect, but its very very good. |
| PheonixLament 2008-04-16 ch 1, | abuseGreat poem. Very very Plath-like. She's one of my favorite writers, The Bell Jar one of my favorite books. I can definitely see her in this poem, like she'd written it herself. But there's also something else, and that's you. This poem is influenced by her, but it's all you and it's beautifully so. The imagery is amazing. I get the feeling of pain without it being mentioned once. "It’s safer to stay numb." Brilliant work, honestly. |
| XsilentXescapeX 2008-03-30 ch 1, | abuseI reaklly liked this especially everything in the parenthesis. likke: (We are but painted butterflies – A mockery, fragile and breaking – With only blood and time.) ~silent |
| yourworstnightmare1823 2008-03-21 ch 1, anon. | abuseP.S. I want my math notebook back! |
| Bonfire Of The Sanities 2008-03-15 ch 1, | abuseVery deep...it has almost a Pink Floyd feel...well done, as always -Ben |
| Deprecor 2008-03-12 ch 1, | abuseThe rhythm of this is amazing, like lyrics to a song, and the descriptions used flowing but still... edged, so to speak. Good job! |