Whoa... That was really good man. I mean, it's kinda true, but kinda not, but still good!

i enjoyed the last line. you seem to be the master of those.

Very interesting. There is a lot to ponder; it intrigued me. Especially the secret; lies will make you strong. Nice fresh idea. Good job.

Wow, this was amazingly beautiful!

"Thunder grins at your demise/Daughter, you will laugh no more" is a very powerful line and I felt the full effect of the poem there.

Well done!

Really good poem. *clap clap*. Write on.

~Anna~

Rather intense... I liked it! It's a bit painful, to hear things like that. To lie, and give up on your dreams... it's heartbreaking.

This is SO strong and SO good. Wonderful work.

Ohh, mysterious. I like the flow of this. And word choice. Too cool.

Peace & Love

Westnedge ~> Park

A very strong poem.

I like the rhythm and the rhyme as well as the overall message. I like how you change the rhyme from time to time. This is sad and lovely at the same time.

'Dipping oars in fuchsia waters' is a really captivating image, as is 'Thunder grins at your demise'. The first and third stanzas are my favorite.