Great story so far. Keep writing!

Interesting story, and your characters are quiet individual. I find the fact that Matty and Chaise almost look like twins kinda creepy though...

Don't be worried about chapter length, really. If its a good story, people won't mind reading the length. If its short, sometimes they work better for certain scenes too.

Keep up the writing!

This is an example of a great piece of literature, almost like prose and in perfect authenticity to Stewert and Ridell. There were a couple of gramatical errors such as perfecting to perfection and old-fashioned should have a -ed on the end but other than that, it is amazing!