Well, you turned this into a great poem! But I must admit that I still use pink and purple gel pens XD

Hey! It looks great, you've go a couple spacing problems different places in the poem, but other then that it's really good! It's going on my favorites!

I like how you write poems; you tend to introduce an emotion or feeling, then branch out from it using common things which are still tethered to the main subject. _ style, makes one think. :)

(I put a _ there because it was either "wicked" or "neat"... so much for my on the spot vocab.)