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| simpleplan13 2008-03-14 ch 1,  | abuseNo matter where you go/What you do.. I think you should put a comma or an or there just to connect those two thoughts I like the personification of their heart and the journey seed, love rose thing was nice too as was the puzzle metaphor.. really nice job |
| Williamchan87 2008-03-14 ch 1, | abuseIts sweet yet, kind of sorrow, cause you want to find this person, but you haven't, yet you have your hopes up and never going to stop. |
| Genesis Angel 2008-03-13 ch 1, | abuseSweet, and shws longing, but I'm not sure I "feel" the longing, as if it's not trerribly personalized. |