Reviews for On the verge of breaking down

Kiss.Today.Goodbye 2008-03-16 ch 1,	abuseI'm not sure about this poem. I feel it starts off with rhythm then loses it. I think it's a good start but could be improved. "I feel the fire touching skin" would fit better either without the "the" or with an added "my" before the skin I think. Also I think it should be "My eyes are burning from within" that just makes better sense. "Hoping it WILL one day subside" sounds better than "would". You have very powerful starting and ending lines but I do think the content could be improved and added to to make it more original. Good luck :)
simpleplan13 2008-03-15 ch 1,	abuseI like this... it has some great images packed into a small piece, but the format... the line lengths flow shorter until bam its longer then back to shortest than longest... it just seemed off, but other than that really awesome job
Willy Boy 2008-03-14 ch 1,	abuseMy eyes are burning within~~can be written as "my eyes burning from within" i know that feeling...experience it everyday good emotional poem