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LaCharlatan 2008-03-15 ch 1,	abuseI am one of those people who read others reviews, many times, before I write my own. Yeah whatever, say what you will--the review I write is still my own. Anyway... You paint with your words--I love it! I'm jealous! I am such a freakin' fan of your imagery that I'm ready to commit...gasp!...blatant plagerism. But don't worry--it's a pointless line to cross. It massacres the reason to write, yes? Poem highlights for me: "never figured out how to cut your own strings"..."too busy with everyone else's"; "you are the cleverest inanimate object i've ever seen, but i have real lips" and more. Oh and the last three lines are the perfect cherry-on-top ending! I kinda got lost at the "he doesn't care for poetry" and "what do you care that he can't appreciate himself?" Not really sure how it fit in and it seemed the flow changed...deliberatly? Anyway, if you haven't figured it out, I'm a fan. And I apologize for the book-like review.
losing gracie girl 2008-03-15 ch 1,	abuseomg. this is amazing. i LOVE the ending...and the beginning...oh wait...and the middle. this is beautiful-witty-perfect...yay! yours until the wind changes, gg
fairytale failure 2008-03-15 ch 1,	abuseGorgeous. To me, the way you say they cut everyone else's strings but not their own, is like the saying 'people in glass houses shouldn't throw stones' - as in, while the marionette was busy ruining someone else's life, you were doing the same to it. Am I right about that? I also love the third stanza; I can relate to the feeling in L3 and 4. Some small suggestions: by the by - sounds slightly outdated, consider 'by the way'. in the third stanza, 'but he / is the prettiest poem of all to you, / right?' sounds like it isn't worded right. You could change it to 'but to you / he is the prettiest poem of all, / right?
PunK.cHEw.AsIAn 2008-03-15 ch 1,	abuseWow. This is very vindictive, but I love it! The way you wrote this is so captivating; I love the lines "you never figured out how to cut your own strings" and "he just fell into my arms without a backward glance at you.", and the last four stanza's are amazing :) This is such an interesting view on love, how it controls people, like a marionette doll. Keep writing wonderfully, and I hope to see more from you soon. -PunK.cHEw.AsIAn P.S. Thank you so much for the reviews!
VIOLENTLYmistaken 2008-03-15 ch 1,	abuseouch.
Disasters Disappointment 2008-03-15 ch 1,	abusewow darling! i love it, esp. the last line. but the whole this was amazing... (ifoundadressbytheway)
wishing.on.echoes 2008-03-15 ch 1,	abuseBitter.

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