Love the imagery. Hon, you're on top of the world, you know this? This poem is unbelievable.

impressive; this is very beautiful and dark and twisted and passionate and eery but compelling all at once. amazing.

Oh God, this is so intense and wonderful! I'm still under the impression. You convey emotions so well, honey! This is amazing!

Oddly, this reminds me of a dream I always had when I was little. It was always full of strange music, and your line 'I hit the same broken piano key again and again' really hit the mark for me.

Great imagery. I like the twisted-ness of this. Is this supposed to represent a love/hate relationship?

My only suggestion is with the line 'how you long to crash me between your fingers'. I think it would sound better with 'crush' instead of 'crash.'