|Reviews for Uncoordinated|
| angrylove888 6/17/10 . chapter 2
Oh, I was a little confused at first. I thought the two chapters were related. But I now see that one has to do with playing a sport and the other is about hair-trouble. These were elegantly written. You have a keen perception of words. You know just how to shape them and mold them into sharp, penetrating passages, able to pierce the reader deep into his/her core. *sigh* teach me, sensei.
your humble servant,
| Miss-You-Too 6/20/09 . chapter 2
Ah I was confused at first, but I think I get it now; she was having trouble with combing her hair.
| lahunnybee 1/22/09 . chapter 2
Really great imagery!
| Phantasmagoria Land 1/17/09 . chapter 1
Oh, I love this, it describes my feeling exactly every time I play volleyball. I just generally suck at it. This is actually the first 50 word story I've seen on FP, and it's quite good. Keep it up!
& Thanks for reviewing me too. (:
| The Beautiful Letdown 1/8/09 . chapter 2
Hah!. You fight wiyh your hair to much!
| listen to what i've never said 1/7/09 . chapter 2
I'm guessing this is about the impossibility of hair in the morning? I understand your battle :P
| listen to what i've never said 1/2/09 . chapter 1
I hear ya :P
| i am Not a Poet 12/25/08 . chapter 1
Oh wow, I didn't see that coming! The very last sentence did it, it was brilliant.) Well done! You should try doing a bunch of 50 word stories, I'm sure it would be amazing.
| fatbird33 3/24/08 . chapter 1
YEAH! i suck at volleyball, not to mention any other sport that involves a ball, which is pretty much every sport...so obviously i loved this and it's going unde rmy favs Fo sho!
| The.Wizard.Pen.Dragon 3/15/08 . chapter 1
LOL! You should try to write a 55-word story! I've posted a bunch and I think you'd be really good at it. But I stink at volleyball too!
| Amertie 3/15/08 . chapter 1
I know how you feel. It's very well written, and I liked reading this. )
| Tranquil Thorns 3/15/08 . chapter 1
This describes me. X
When we had volleyball for gym this year I couldn't even serve. Talk about embarrassing. You depict the scene quite well in such a short piece.