I like it. In particular, the use of italicized words at the end of each verse caught my eye- it creates such a beautiful rhythym. The poem itself is curiously fleeting and vivid in its description, which gives an image of the dance you speak of: short sharp movements, punctuated by longer, smoother phrases.

Overall, a nice job. Faintly Greek in its style, and bizarrely but interestingly handled. My commendations.

-Steampunk Champagne