I didn't really like that your thoughts weren't complete in each line because even in poems, it is important to have complete thoughts and coherent sentences or phrases so that you can properly convey what you are trying to say to your reader. I didn't get that impression on this poem.

Another thing that I didn't really like was the fact that there is no punctuation because even though I have line breaks to help me, the reader, see where you want a thought to end, I am the one who assumed it and it would be better if I could see what the author had wanted for me to see where they want breaks and pauses in the poem.

I didn't really understand this poem - you title this and mention in your summary that this is about truth (and lies?) so in what instance was there any talk about your subject? This poem is a little vague and can definitely be expanded upon and improved.

-silv3rdr34ms
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i really love how you can express so much emotion in such short poems, this is amazing! ; )

I like it, it really good!

I think I can relate to this.