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| bella.fleur 2008-03-16 ch 1,  | abuseAw, I like this. It made me think and it made me smile, which is good. =] It's also pretty inspiring, in a way. I love the stars. |
| Tranquil Thorns 2008-03-16 ch 1, | abuseI think the line 'if they didn't they wouldn't know what to do when they fell' inspired me. So thank you for that. (: As to your poem, I like the two distinct voices you created. I associated one of them with an adult and the other with a child. 'like murders?' is a very cute line. In the line 'no, to young', I think you mean 'too' instead of 'to', but other than that I thought this was very nice. (: |