beautiful.
great job!

yours until the wind changes,
gg

i like how the lines all end in -ing til the last two lines which rhyme. pulls it all together.

I'm not a real fan of poetry, however, you seem to have done decently well for a poem. Maybe because you've been able to do a considerable amount with little. Keep up the writing.

the last two lines hit hard.
intense in its conciseness, great work.

This is awesome...and very scary. "like anger building, screaming..." the same anger and screams you hear about every day on the news. "Planet's storm approaching"...a very powerful image.

Turbulent and vivid. I like how you use short, poignant phrases instead of description, it works so much better for what you're trying to do. Lovely job, my commendations.

-SC