The title you picked for this is so true and goes along so nicely with the piece itself.
You explain love so simply and in so few words while at the same time those words hold so much in them and so many strong feelings are portrayed in such a short piece.
This is lovely :)

I loved the first line: ‘when you kiss me stars roll off your tongue’ it makes me think that deep inside someone’s mouth the whole universe is waiting to creep out. It has a mythical angle to it, like a story told by civilizations long dead.

I also liked how you paired fireworks and bullets together, they seem the same, yet they have very different effects. It was a very striking combination. Keep up the good work.

Much love,
Juliet.


Jules, via the Review Marathon (links in my profile)

The last line makes this poem.

Keep writing!

yay! you updated.. romantic & simple.. love this ~♥

i love the first 2 lines.
beautiful!

yours until the wind changes,
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I like how you portray the romance as being not just pure good, but also... troubling, with the use of "bullets" and "anxious". Interesting.

Actually bullets aren't romantic at all...and they don't fit into the fireworks/sparkle/stars imagery of the rest of the poem. And anxious thoughts? Why are they anxious when you sound so happy?
But I love the line, "when you kiss me stars roll of your tongue"...that's just beautiful. It's a lovely romantic poem.

"when you kiss me stars roll off your tongue"- fantastic line. the title doesn't match the poem in a way, but in another way, it's perfect. i guess it's all in the perspective. "anxious thoughts of loving you"- wonderful.