hmm... I'm not sure what to make of it. Your past, I mean. I'm not 100% sure if your mad at your brother for leaving or you're sad he left to fight. I really liked this! It made me think!

You are truly a brilliant poet =]

Just wow...the last three lines hit hard emotionally. One of my favorite lines is "Kill the men who are just like you". Because that is so very true. Someone is killed who just like the killer, have families and a life back home and somebody who will be hurt when they find that they are gone.

I liked the lack of too many words or sentences in this one. It's simple. It's effective.

This is brilliant!! love it

konnichi wa

The emotion behind it definitely isn't lacking, but I think it would have been better if it didn't rhyme. Personal preference. :)

Stunning last line: "And they won't look you in the eye."

Ha det
-Shan-

great poem but i would add more...but I'm just a fellow poet like your self so yeah. Fun with ur poetry and so on =]

A powerful poem.

The lines 'But don’t be surprised/When you come home broken' stood out to me especially, because they are so true.

Best of luck!