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Reviews For: The Firestorm

LeenaElle 2008-04-17 ch 4,	abuseOh excitement!! I'm can't wait for the next chapter. I was actually thinking you would have the two girls switch in and out of the basement because you had made such a strong point of telling us how similar they both looked. I am excited to see what happens when she comes into the light, hopefully Karl won't be around!!
LeenaElle 2008-04-17 ch 3,	abuseWow...what a creep. You've portrated his character awesomely! I'm wondering if the Adlers made it through the deportation, if they're still alive somewhere. The drama definitely isn't over yet!
LeenaElle 2008-04-17 ch 2,	abuseWow, what an incredibly powerful chapter! I felt like you conveyed the emotion of the two families extraordinarily well, especially Kyla's! My eye's were glued to the screen, I was reading so fast just to find out what was going to happen. Great job!
LeenaElle 2008-04-17 ch 1,	abuseReally compelling first chapter! I like that the description of your characters has a point in the story, unlike a lot of descriptions that can sometimes bog down a stories plot, these helped the reader to gain understanding of whatever might come, is a result of their looking so similar, and being so close. I also like your ending line, definitely pulls the reader to the "next chapter" button.
Mileana 2008-04-14 ch 4,	abuseOh, cliff hanger. Well, kinda. Interesting chapter. Really got to see a bit more of Kyla which was great. Your description as usual is fantastic. Some of their dialouge seemed a bit modern for their time, might want to be careful of that. Can't wait for the next chapter! Keep it up! Mileana x
Captain Walsh 2008-04-12 ch 4,	abuseHELLO! Ok. Review time. This chapter was really good. It really showed you Kayla's vulnerability and made her seem so much more. . . . (can't think of an adjective)! The ending of the chapter is really good cos it's a bit o a cliffhanger and it, like, totally draws you in :)!
flea writer 2008-04-08 ch 2,	abuseo.. i like! i've only read the first chapter b/c of my time limiting obligations :), but i will most certainly finish the other two later today or tomorrow :) i enjoy your writing style, although i would suggest a scene or two here or there as to show more and not tell as much. Although, maybe it wouldn't be such a good idea to include more scenes in the first chapter anyway b/c it sounds more like a prologue than the first chapter? But anyways, i liked it and am looking forward to reading more :)
Festina 2008-04-03 ch 3,	abuseI'm finding this story really interesting so far, it's original (there's so many ww2 stories around) and it has a very good sense of time. I like the way you've been able to tell the story from different perspectives too. Looking forward to learning more about the main characters too though, therefore you have to update! xFestinax
Mileana 2008-04-02 ch 3,	abuseAnother great chapter! I admire the way you can write the different characters and still make the story flow so well. A bit more dialogue might make it slightly easier to read. Wonderful descriptions as usual! Mileana x
Captain Walsh 2008-03-22 ch 2,	abuseHello again. Wow, really powerful chapter dude, especially at the end. It was so sad! It was so true to life. Often with historical fiction it doesn't really ring true but I'm really believing this. Must read on...
Captain Walsh 2008-03-22 ch 1,	abuseGreetings. Really good start. You introduce the main characters really well and the sense of time and place is very strong. I like the whole sense of foreboding as well, it makes you want to KEEP READING! So I will.
Alana 2008-03-20 ch 2, anon.	abuseInteresting start, I love your writing. Looking forward to more. ~Alana~
Mileana 2008-03-19 ch 2,	abuse:0 I love it! I read a lot of WWII stories so it's nice to find something original in the category. Your writing flows really nicely and is really easy to read. No spelling or grammar mistakes as far as I can see. Cannot wait for the next chapter! Mileana x
Mileana 2008-03-19 ch 1,	abuseGood prologue. Your description is great and you gave just enough back story so that it didn't drone on and on. You gave the important facts but still made it seem personal. Great last line as well. continues reading Mileana x

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