"bright tongues dancing and clapping" and "the brown bottles of escape"

so evocative.

the last stanza is brilliant. maybe rework the earlier stanzas so the focus is on the imagery you create there.

probably one of your most beautiful besides "dawning blue" and "in the quiet hours".

Ouch, somebody's angry at Jesus.

I think you're venting more toward the Catholic Church than God, but the emotion's definitely there. Sarcasm, bitterness, woven into your phrases, blunt ending fits it perfectly.

"precious passion" indeed.

Would you like some virtual cookies and hot chocolate?

It is eerie how alike our minds our in some ways...

Normally, when I review, I like to pick out a passage that I liked the best, or that spoke to me in some way.

If I did that here, I'd probably run out of character spaces :)

:glomp:

You know where to find me.

As per usual, I love this. Keep it up.
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wow. just, wow. It turned out better than I could have ever imagined. you, love, amaze me. *favs*
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as usual, pretty. I love it. I like the changes you made too.
good job!
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hell yes! I love it. Im so excited to see what you say
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