 shutitoff 2008-04-07 . chapter 1Oh wow. I thought I'd just take a look at your stuff - and I am glad that I did!
The inspiration is clear here but you've found a way to make it original and even slightly abstract. Perhaps the title Ana is too obvious? Perhaps not. In any case, I like how you have described her spine. Chilling. I also liked how you used words like pretty, lucky, content and pride to show her skewed view of the world. |