Oh, fuck. This gave me an inverse boner.

I hate you.

You know what? I really liked how this story was all about sex, yet it doesn't seem gratuitous. All those contextual hints and references, Kaosu's nympho character... It worked. The presence of Kaosu's tentacles was a little disturbing; you've both explained and justified it, but still... Anyway, good job on creating this whole universe; did you base it on any specific mythology?

I noticed a couple of typos whilst reading this; "taught outer lips" instead of "taut", naval instead of navel, alter instead of altar... Those are all that I can remember. And though I like the writing style of this piece, I felt the tone was sometimes spoiled by the occasional modernism; like "absolutely awesome", "burning hot cum", "Nice bondage collar". That's just me being nitpicky though.

Good job!