 Humming LadyBug 2009-02-10 . chapter 1Wow. First up, this is a perfect example of a young girl with too much imagination, believing that something super duper extraordinary is going to happen in her boring, gray life and the irony and sarcasm you added in makes it all the more humorous. Wonder if Alexa is ever gonna make it out of that denial state of hers.
Good job. Hope you do continue it :) |
 HollytheVampire 2008-05-18 . chapter 1I like this a lot. It's funny and it's kinda realistic which is great. And on my story yeah, I like to be random a bunch of times. So be expecting a lot more randomness! Oh, and you made my day too. |
 ME~ 2008-03-21 . chapter 1 Hey!! I liked your story!! Very nice!! Miss ya! How's Caledonia? |
 Kar-zid 2008-03-21 . chapter 1Awesome story, it was funny in a crazy sort of way! ^_^ Yes, reality is boring. |
 PrettiestWretchedWhore 2008-03-21 . chapter 1Good job! I enjoyed this story quite a bit. You seem to have a knack for character development and its makes your stories interesting. Just a couple of things for constructive critism: "I wear gray a lot, and it really does so happen that people don’t tend to notice me" could be rewritten to make more sense and when you said "Anyway... Without" the W didn't need a capital. Actually I think you would probably be better off without saying anyway in a story at all, but that's just my opinion. Also maybe you would benefit from more of a solidified plot.
~Keep writing!~ |
 Deimus Maxiran 2008-03-17 . chapter 1When I read the first line I thought "Ugh, same old story every time," then I realized the part about being a spy was made up. This made me laugh, keep up the great work! I would suggest trying to add more description and actual dialog instead of "the professor yelled at us". Also I don't see how it can be the first day freshman year and there is already a "most popular girl". Things like that can happen fast, but not THAT fast.
Overall you have a good idea in your head. Work on your writing and develop a concrete plot so that this turns out into something to be proud of! |
 xLoveMuffinx 2008-03-17 . chapter 1... interesting... but i like it you're all like making a bunch of stories now... |
 Scorpia710 2008-03-17 . chapter 1Lol, good job! Please write more! |