Do you know chapter 2 has nothing in it?

Anyhow... I like this too. It's nice and I like the whole white flag thing. The only thing is in teh first stanza you meant from can to could, which sounded awkward. Other than that nice job.

I like this... the descriptions are nice, especially the part about the remains of the will in a broken pile. I also like the chorus part. Nice job.

Btw thanks for your review. I saw you're part of the review revolution, maybe check out the review game forum it's awesome

I like this, I can relate to it as well. Though mine ended with him breaking it off in the end, that hurt. I like your chorus. Wonderfully written.

Keep it up.

I wish I could hear it instead of just read it, :( It was okay, not great but I've read worse. :)
Write some more!