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| Twilight Starr 2008-07-10 ch 2,  | abuseGreat, dramatic chapter. Nice work. ~Twilight Starr~ |
| Faith Adeline 2008-03-24 ch 6, | abusegood chapter, I liked it. Just try to pick things up a little. That's my only suggestion. Keep it up, and update soon. Faith |
| Faith Adeline 2008-03-22 ch 5, | abusegood chapter. I liked it. Keep it up and update soon. Faith |
| Faith Adeline 2008-03-20 ch 4, | abusegood chapter. There were some grammatical errors, such as not using a comma when you should, and things like that, but overall it was good. Keep it up and update soon. Faith |
| Twilight Starr 2008-03-20 ch 1, | abuseGreat job on description. Good beginning. Good luck with writing, this story, and life. Have an excellent day. ~Twilight Starr~ |
| Faith Adeline 2008-03-19 ch 3, | abusegood chapter, a bit repetitive of the other two, like the feelings in it, but that's fine because of the subject. Just make sure you don't get too repetitive and start mentioning things over and over and over. You're right about the sins, just you saying anger threw me for some reason cause I say wrath. Gah. Also, thoughts don't need "", just italizing them works. Keep it up and update soon. Faith |
| Beast King 2008-03-19 ch 1, | abuseThis is a good beginning, a new take on romance. I like the idea of psychic empathy thing. Great. |
| Faith Adeline 2008-03-18 ch 2, | abusegreat chapter, I really liked it. Although Greed isn't a deadly sin, it's Wrath :) lol. Keep it up and update soon Faith |
| momichi5 2008-03-18 ch 1, | abusenice story... more of a romance story but i give it a 8 out of ten. who is he though |
| Faith Adeline 2008-03-17 ch 1, | abuseGood first chapter. This has potential. Keep it up, and update soon. Faith |
| Akulshae Phenotic 2008-03-17 ch 1, | abuseNice start off, it definately has an emotional feel in the writing. Admittedly we have no idea who's named what, but I feel like it wasn't needed for this first chapter. Though I did see one spelling error. But for the most part, other then that one thing it was obviously well written and easy to understand. So congrats. Shame though that, this just doesn't seem to have anywhere to go yet. Which might deter future readers. Then again that's just my opinion. Other then that, this still seems fairly good. |