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alittlebitconfused 2008-03-17 . chapter 1
Wow... You're right, disturbing. But good. Really good. I liked your description and your imagery. Really nice.
I love the last three lines:
"Unseen
Unheard
Forgotten"
They really make the rest of the poem sink in, in all of its horror.
Wow.. Sad, but amazing.
Tranquil Thorns 2008-03-17 . chapter 1
Eerie!

The flow of images reminded me of some type of horror movie trailer. ;P 'The clinking of chains resounds/in this darkened chamber' is a great picture.

For me, the sentence 'I fall to the ground crushed under their weight' breaks the flow a little. Maybe 'I'm crushed to the ground by their weight' or something along those lines would read better.

You got me wondering about the story behind this poem, and I like that.
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