short but strikingly terse. the diction is a little undermining but flows nicely. my other qualm with the piece is the couplet of the piece. i personally try to avoid a variation of the same word twice within a stanza, but then again that may be just me. thanks for the enjoyable read.

arcane

I love the last two lines because it was a really great contrast. I also like the repetition... two things though. The punctuation you had it some places, but were missing it in others (like after longer and believe in you and I). Also in the third stanza the second line seemed short when compared to the other two stanzas. But still it's a really great piece.