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Fractured Illusion 2008-10-19 . chapter 1
"existence of god"
- Since you seem to talk of one god, then I think you spell it God. I dont know for sure though

"and their was nothing more"
- there

"His finally resting place"
- final

"but it’s origins were a mystery."
- its

"The umbrella had appeared out of nowhere into nowhere."
- Hah I like this line. Interesting way to see it :)

Although this comes off more as humor, it's still a nice piece. I think we've all caught a lucky break like that so we can relate :)

- Frac, from the Review Marathon (link on my profile).
stardustfaery 2008-04-21 . chapter 1
:)wow. That was an adorable story. Amazing what an umbrella can do? I thought you captured a fuzzy warm feeling very well.
Mom 2008-03-18 . chapter 1
Very funny ending. (You hurt my sore laughing muscles!) I really like this one, though you need to proofread it again. Lots of typos sweety.
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