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| fatbird33 2008-06-17 ch 1, | abuseaw this is SO sad. but well written, so that's good. yay, rhyming. |
| perpetual questions 2008-04-20 ch 1, | abusea little confusing, but that's not a bad thing. the 'He smiled at me' is good-creepy. .adrian. |
| Faith Adeline 2008-03-18 ch 1, | abusewow, I loved this! Great piece! Faith |
| painted.music 2008-03-18 ch 1, | abusekonban wa This. Is. Breathtaking. Simple stunning. Truly. I have no words to describe it. I always loved those simplistic statements that seem to be so KNOWING at the same time as being simple. That last line you wrote was exactly that, and it left me SPEECHLESS. -Really!- "I won't make it out alive." Brill. Just... brill. Ha det -Shan- |
| ten pts above average 2008-03-18 ch 1, | abusethe last three lines are a.m.a.z.i.n.g |
| eville 2008-03-18 ch 1, | abuselove it. x |
| lonely silhouette 2008-03-18 ch 1, | abuseSo...is the point that the doctor was his own patient, and he realized he was going to die? If so, it was well written, yet may be confusing to some readers (like the one above, i think). |
| MandyMisfit 2008-03-18 ch 1, | abuseWow I like it. very flowing. =0 But it's like there's three parts to this and they don't fit together for me. Like what actually happened to him? |