aw this is SO sad. but well written, so that's good. yay, rhyming.

a little confusing, but that's not a bad thing. the 'He smiled at me' is good-creepy.
.adrian.

wow, I loved this! Great piece!
Faith

konban wa

This. Is. Breathtaking. Simple stunning. Truly. I have no words to describe it. I always loved those simplistic statements that seem to be so KNOWING at the same time as being simple. That last line you wrote was exactly that, and it left me SPEECHLESS. -Really!-

"I won't make it out alive." Brill. Just... brill.

Ha det
-Shan-

the last three lines are a.m.a.z.i.n.g

love it. x

So...is the point that the doctor was his own patient, and he realized he was going to die? If so, it was well written, yet may be confusing to some readers (like the one above, i think).

Wow I like it. very flowing. =0 But it's like there's three parts to this and they don't fit together for me. Like what actually happened to him?