Well-written. I like the fact that you actually get into the minds of your characters, something that people here don't do. I'm not sure about the plot yet, so I can't offer comment there. Anyway, keep it up. Nice job.

If it weren't for the fact that this was about a werewolf, I'd have been really intrigued to read further into this! I'm not saying it's bad--because it's NOT--it's really, really good. I love the way you described the change, and how you were inside the mind of Jez as he changed. Uusually, when people read such things, they're on the outside, looking at whatever subject is being wrote about.

This was a great, short read...I just have this thing against werewolves. I think all those crappy horror movies are what ruined it for me-and yes, I've seen Underworld, and as kick-** as it was, it didn't help.

Very well written, with a nice mixture of description and action. A bit short, perhaps, to be Book I in its entirety, but that's a stylistic nitpick. ;)

There are a few typos and misspellings, but overall it's an easy read - which is a great relief online, let me tell you. :D

I'd be interested to know Victoria's reaction!

Regards,
Ten-chan