My favorite lines:
"And I'd look into your eyes for a map of the universe"
"As long as I see you when I open my soul"

this was excellent, mob. not much criticism or "gilding of the lily" here...just a very interesting piece. i liked it a lot.

always, Irony

This reads like a story. It makes me want to know what the two of you did to destroy the world. There isn't too much in terms of imagery or structure, but it doesn't seem to need it.