really good, I love the suspense and wondering about what's going to pop up next, keep up the good work!

Hm, bloody baby! can't wait to read more!

It's looking really good! There were a couple bits where a bit of punctuation could have helped - for example with 'I remembered where I was I guess everything wasn't a dream' you could put a dash or a comma. Other than that, I quite like it. Keep updating!

...hooked! Can't wait to read more!

It's a pretty decent start so far. I would really like to see where you take this in future chapters. And I liked how you provided a small bit of past events at the end so the readers can also begin to understand the situation better.

Oerr, that's looking good. Part of me's a bit iffy about the dialogue, but I think that's just my mind being awkward and tired. The end of this chapter has made me sure that I'll read the next chapter when (not if) you update it.

Is there going to be more to this story? It just jumped into a flashback? with no explanation and I'm a little confused...it was really good up to that point, then it just ended abrubtly.
~ravenurse