I liked the way in the middle you kept repeating the line: "gonna get in the car with a smile and the burn that i put on my arm the day you went away, girl, and i probably won't come back around again." It seemed to add to the piece as a whole and helped to get the point of your writing across.

Also, I liked how you got right into the head of your narrator and I think that it gets the feelings across very well, true feelings. :D

you're amazing.
and this story is so good.
not many people can really pull off song-fics, but you definitely did.

This was a good piece, I enjoyed reading it =)
Faith

i really liked this. great piece :)
Faith

I thought this was a great piece. Wonderfully written. Great job! Keep it up :)
Faith

I love it! Absolutely beautiful. Can't wait for the next installmeant

wow, great start. I really liked this and the emotion is good. Keep it up!
Faith