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| Tranquil Thorns 2008-03-18 ch 1,  | abuseInteresting concept! My favorites were the ending lines, the one involving root beer especially. ;D Overall I like the flow, but the line 'the answer is pro, not con' seemed a bit awkward. I understand what you're trying to say, and I see that you phrased it for the sake of a rhyme, but I think it can be improved. |