(I don't wanna log in. Bite me.)
First, ze SPAGs: "I'm sorry." (period inside the quotations)
"placed *their by your/blindness." *there
Yeah, so that was a failed attempt at corrections. Moving on, Amber.
I am not really sure what you meant for this to be about (am I daft, or what?) but I just like the imagery in this a lot.

Falcon

deep. i like it lots. write on my friend

The words create a tone and mood that transcends the phrase "beautifully eerie."

This is much darker than your usual work but very well done, none the less!