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I love how the first line draws you in and there's just a feeling of loss and could-have-been (if that makes sense!). You described her really detailed and precise, and I particularly like "spider web veins". I can practically see her in my mind's eye.

Great job (:

whilst too-tight skirt... I feel like there should be an a there

I really love this piece. The descriptions are really heartbreaking and powerful. The whole piece is wonderful... especially how the first line sets up the idea that there was such potential lost.

Raw, honest and powerful. This is a good poem made great by an inspired ending line. Anyways, keep up the good work!

-right2reality

sad and true. love the imagery. write on

As I've said, this is one h*ll of a raw poem. The descriptions are wonderful. I love how you ended the poem, btw. I think that's my favorite part. And, of course, thanks for the credit in the summary. :]

it's very descriptive. I love the line that says she played her fairy tale backward.