 Tranquil Thorns 2008-03-19 . chapter 1I enjoyed reading this.
I liked the idea here, though the thought of someone sitting and waiting for eternity is a little depressing. I guess that's the point. =X
My one problem is with the line 'Making myself a fool', because I thought it broke the rhythm a little. For me, 'Waiting like a fool' sounds better, but it's just a suggestion.
Good poem! |