I think the piper freaked out over nothing-killing the children just because he didn't get payed. You did good with the writing, though. Keep up the good work.

Hey, I think you did a really good job with this. It has that olden day flair to it (fairytale-ish). The Pied Piper is a poem, correct? Well, regardless, I think you did a good job (I think I noticed a few misspellings or something, but whatever).

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