nice concept. i think the idea of unity, you and me complete each other, is overdone, but whatever you want, right? I liked.

I love those two songs and I can definately see where you got your inspiration from. However, I do have to agree with the fact that some lines are taken directly from the song 'Broken'. Be a little creative and experiment with those lines. Otherwise, good job.

hehe. i love those two songs. ^_^

*sob sob* Brivissima, dearest!! Lovely, truly lovely, even though it's pretty obvious you got inspitation from the song...

Best poem youv'e ever written, really...
Who Else,
Frenchie-chan

Actually, I do believe I saw parts that were taken directly from "Broken"..Maybe I'm delusional, but you may want to consider mixing it up a bit. It's too much like you're a parasite feeding off somebody elses creativity, if you feel what I'm saying.

Good job, but it's pretty obvious the inspiration came from those songs. Maybe you should think about changing word selection and delivery of sentences. Keep writing.

~Anna~ ^_^