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| AK the Twilight 2008-06-11 ch 1,  | abuseAlthough I never seemed to figure out the significance of Quartz entirely (is it someone's name?), I found this song to be a really good one. Your word choice is as strong as ever, and lines like "there's a rip in my chest" feel visceral and emphasis-filled. There's a core of meaning, and despite feeling a bit stream-of-consciousness born, this was a really good song that actually felt like it could benefit from music. Overall, I found this to be another great work from you, definitely one of the best. Keep it up! |
| Apheliac 2008-03-25 ch 1, | abuseThis is amazing! My fave of your songs so far :) This is really good. I like your repetition of lines, again. |
| shutitoff 2008-03-25 ch 1, | abuseThis one reads like a poem. The emotion especially is beautiful. |
| simpleplan13 2008-03-21 ch 1, | abuseEverybody got something to tell... has Everybody got a secret to reveal... has but nobody is able to tell (... the ( shouldn't be there The summer in wich.. which and took a walk in the beach... on the beach it were erased by the waves... i dont think you need the it, but if you want something before were it should be they The spring in wich... which The autumn in wich.. which I like the repetition a lot and I also like how you go through all the seasons. The descriptions are really great. |